Only a genuis can correct this essay? Please correct if you have good english ONLY correct grammar and spellin?

Sorry, it's rather boring - largely because it is so very very derivative. There are thousands if not hundreds of thousands of people, either on their own or going to so-called 'creative writing' classes, churning out this sort of thing. If you are interested in writing fiction, forget the sort of pulp you have evidently been reading, and do your very best to write something original. Get your OWN ideasdown on paper - these are not your own ideas, these are just standard pulp fiction or comic book formulae. Very, very dull. You do need to work on your punctuation as well.